Scar
Honour
You appear
Silent flowing river
Drops for us to ponder
Lost in an infinite act within times whisper
Flesh and stone creep closer in the intimate dance of the predestined hour
Your crimson stripes woven into a golden strand
Entering into the promised land
Black open void
Lay cold
Blood
Red
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Written for Poetry Jam and Poets United
Life From A Park Bench 
This is the ultimate sacrifice.
Alan, I will comment on your poem if I see that you comment on others. As far as I see in all communities (two today already that I have seen) you drop a link, don’t comment in the comment box, and just wait for others to comment on your poems. The blogosphere should not be a one-way street. Writing a poem is one thing, but reciprocity is equally important.
Really sorry if i have upset you, the only reason i could not drop a link is that the computer i was working on went down and i have just got back home after work to go back to post the link. Really sorry if i caused anyone to get upset,.
I still don’t think you understand though, Alan. In the same way other people comment on your poem here on your blog, can you not visit other people’s blogs and leave comments in regard to their poems?
Since my initial comment, I notice you have been working you way through Poets United (with the exception of mine), so hope to see you at Poetry Jam as well. Truly I would not say anything if this was a one time thing…but it has been the usual; and we all enjoy comments in addition to reading and commenting on someone else’s poem. You are welcome to erase all these comments if you wish. You do write good poetry, but sometimes I think ‘fair is fair’ as far as the other part of relating in the blogosphere.
The photo perfectly accompanies this poem, one thinks of blood and death. “Black open void” is especially strong.
The key words… scar, flesh, blood, red, convey a depth of pain and suffering within this true-to-form piece. The shape of the poem is so pleasing, the topic is thought-provoking. Thank you for participating, Alan.
so much here
and the blood of victory
yes
I really like ‘your crimson stripes woven into a golden strand.’ That is an especially strong image.
I like your Crimson Stripes. The photo or illustration is lovely and the whole thing draws me in. I am glad you tried my prompt!
The imagery here is beautiful … but disturbing too! Every week that I come to these writing challenges, I read every entry and there are always a few that I must return to several times over the course of the week to re-read and re-think. This is one of them for me this week. Thank you …
I like the “infinite act” and “intimate dance” stanzas – sharp enough to leave a scar, especially since I’m reading a book now with a human sacrifice theme.
… something chilling about a ‘predestined hour.’ I enjoyed this.
Your crimson stripes woven into a golden strand
Entering into the promised land
nice….really brings out the spiritual aspects of this piece…nicely done….
Love the structure of this. Great biblical imagery.
absolutely brilliant, I love the way it journeys
lots of good lines here…..thanks for sharing
Thank you all for visiting and commenting.
Life is full of learning experiences and this week has certainly been a learning experience for me.
I cannot change the past, but i can change for the present and move forward into the future.
Be blessed and thank you and for all your kind and helpful comments.
Fascinating! You take it way beyond a mere exercise, which I think is hard to do with a ofrm like this.
*form
the longest middle line is really nice!
Gripping poem – inspires many images