A Window


My eyes are heavy

The light burns my heart

Deep within

Illuminating my blackness

I dream

Of another color

Another sun

Another shore

Another mirror

Another embrace

In the quiet


That swallows fear

I reach out

For the cure

To an open heart

To be near you


The world continues

Around me

Hoping to follow

Open me

A window


Written for Poetry Jam and Poets United- Verse First

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18 Responses to A Window

  1. Mary says:

    Open hearts and open windows (especially with the sun shining in) — both are so important in life, I think. (Especially if one is not feeling well)

  2. aprille says:

    Poignant is the word.
    white light reflected
    prismatically speaking
    sum of all colours

  3. Love this. The repitition of the word “another” real makes for focused powerful emotion.

  4. nice…this builds really well alan….the repetition of another…and open heart and open window…

  5. Laurie Kolp says:

    Hi, Alan- So much here… love the heart/ window & from blackness to color.

  6. peggygoetz says:

    I feel like there is both some sadness as well as hope for the future in this poem. I am thinking here that a window is a sort of prism and by opening it the view will be different. Thanks for this prompt.

  7. Write Girl says:

    Amazing poem. We can feel the longing for an open window.

  8. Sara V says:

    Alan, great prompt and great poem–so much feeling flowing through it, and then that ending (really loved that ending) 🙂 Excellent

  9. Love this, great poem!

  10. Kim Nelson says:

    The quiet solitude that swallows fear… a great line that leads me to increasingly value the power of meditation. Your imagery, repetition, flow and form stitch this poem potently together. One of my favorite responses to the Verse First prompt.

  11. Melancholic and hopeful at the same time. Lovely imagery and lines here, from blackness to color, leaving the heart and window open 🙂

  12. I really like the ending – open me a window – so much hope right outside that window!

  13. Sabio Lantz says:

    The ending of the window (with the pic) is fitting for the longing. Nice emotional development. (BTW, this the first time to your blog and as I scroll down, I see all your poems in the same form — I wrote a little ditty on that).

  14. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) says:

    Very romantic!

  15. such a cry, with the image it’s like afairy tale

  16. Grace says:

    I like the heartfelt plea, open me a window ~

  17. “Another” fan of the redundancy. It strings everything together nicely. Well written, Alan.

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