Out of the Window

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Chains of light die, lifeless scenes plea,

Remote latticed roofs kiss the sky,

Storm sun illuminates each tree,

Chains of light die.

 

On the table, lonely magpie,

One visit from litters debris,

Leaves his haunt, in heaven to fly.

 

Temple of rest, safe guarantee,

Pool of winter, your last good-bye

Dusk comes quickly, as sun’s rays flee,

Chains of light die.

 

 

Written for:-

D’verse – Poetics

Poets united – Poetry Pantry

Sunday Whirl

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41 Responses to Out of the Window

  1. Mary says:

    I enjoyed the images I pictured as I read your poem, Alan. The repetition of the words ‘chains of light die’ worked well for emphasis.

  2. kaykuala says:

    The refrain makes it unique and effective. Well crafted!

    Hank

  3. Beautifully crafted words.

  4. Misky says:

    Splendid imagery.

  5. kelvin s.m. says:

    a beautiful images so well penned, Alan… it brings warmth & hope & makes all the wait worth it… lovely bright offering… smiles…

  6. Jae Rose says:

    Each word, sentence and verse is link like a chain of thought..there is a thankfulness for the light and moment which is very calm and certain

  7. magicalmysticalteacher says:

    Something in me wants to pity the lonely magpie, even though such birds can be obnoxious at times.

    Litter

  8. You’ve given beauty to the magpie’s temple of rest.

  9. brian miller says:

    nice….cool little garden in your yard alan…would not mind to be the magpie to take to the skies…..cool use of form….

  10. annell4 says:

    I felt a sadness here?

  11. I feel the brief daylight captured in this.. A melancholy tone that hits home for me.

  12. Your words paint such a vivid picture. Lovely.

  13. julespaige says:

    Thanks for your visit to my place.

    Magpies need places to rest… I can see this winter pause, a lovely enchantment.

  14. Marianne says:

    Your use of repetition is powerful! I am always drawn to the world outside the window.

  15. coalkissed says:

    This beautiful!! Love the word picture you painted. The repetition of “chains of light die” really enhances the poem 🙂

  16. I love the view outside your window. What a pretty garden! Your poem seems to evoke a transition from winter to spring … days are getting longer and light is increasing. Lovely imagery 🙂

  17. Sabra Bowers says:

    I like how your words paint with image and feeling. Great job.

  18. poetrypea says:

    I love watching a storm pass us by from the comfort of my window.

  19. Grace says:

    I like the refrain,chains of light die ~ I can’t wait for spring to perk up those blooms in the garden ~

  20. An excellent use of the roundel form, your descriptions create that uncertain sesonal mood very well.

  21. Gabriella says:

    I enjoyed the repetition in your poem, Alan. “Remote latticed roofs kiss the sky” – great image.

  22. kkkkaty says:

    There’s something about the light changes in a storm that brings out many moods…I like this reference.

  23. 1sojournal says:

    Really like the chains of light, the magpie, and the temple of rest…

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2014/01/12/in-the-aftermath/

  24. This is rather haunting, Alan….I love the repeated line……the “lonely magpie” and “your last goodbye”. Sigh. Beautiful.

  25. The lonely magpie, the chains of light die…I feel the melancholy, the sad feeling that comes with such brief gray days.

  26. Hi Alan, really enjoyed this – a depth of yearning and truth delicately achieved with a few vivid observations artfully juxtaposed – interesting work.. I’ll be back for more… All the Best to you Scott http://www.scotthastie.com

  27. So well crafted–lovely this ittle observation of life!

  28. shanyns says:

    The yearning of a window view in winter – captured so well in your piece. Thank you for joining us for Poetics!

  29. Alan,

    Seems like we are all engaged in seeking hope and inspiration very soon, while gazing from the windows!!

    Eileen

  30. ZQ says:

    Thank you. a very nice piece

  31. humbird says:

    I feel melancholie here, and refren just saying that everything has end, which follow by sunrays again…:) ~ thanks for visit/comment at my blog~ much love

  32. quite an imagery … lovely piece 🙂

  33. Myrna says:

    This is beautiful, sad but it describes a true emotion and something that none of us can escape.

  34. whimsygizmo says:

    This is lovely. Your repetition works well for you here.

  35. dani says:

    oooh! i love “Chains of light die”! very effective as your repeat line!

  36. Ankita says:

    Beautiful imagery crafted by great choice of your words! 🙂

  37. Akila says:

    The refrain polishes every image here! lovely…

  38. Stormcat says:

    Am I wrong. This seems melancholy to me. Like maybe someone is missing the summer?

  39. Pamela says:

    Alan, lovely poem. And this part almost made me cry,

    “Temple of rest, safe guarantee,

    Pool of winter, your last good-bye

    Dusk comes quickly, as sun’s rays flee,

    Chains of light die.”

    Thanks for me reading my piece, and it is a pleasure to meet you.

    Pamela

  40. dsnake1 says:

    i sensed some melancholy here? but the images are lovely. and i think the refrain works really well. 🙂

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