Chains of light die, lifeless scenes plea,
Remote latticed roofs kiss the sky,
Storm sun illuminates each tree,
Chains of light die.
On the table, lonely magpie,
One visit from litters debris,
Leaves his haunt, in heaven to fly.
Temple of rest, safe guarantee,
Pool of winter, your last good-bye
Dusk comes quickly, as sun’s rays flee,
Chains of light die.
Written for:-
Life From A Park Bench 
I enjoyed the images I pictured as I read your poem, Alan. The repetition of the words ‘chains of light die’ worked well for emphasis.
The refrain makes it unique and effective. Well crafted!
Hank
Beautifully crafted words.
Splendid imagery.
a beautiful images so well penned, Alan… it brings warmth & hope & makes all the wait worth it… lovely bright offering… smiles…
Each word, sentence and verse is link like a chain of thought..there is a thankfulness for the light and moment which is very calm and certain
Something in me wants to pity the lonely magpie, even though such birds can be obnoxious at times.
Litter
You’ve given beauty to the magpie’s temple of rest.
nice….cool little garden in your yard alan…would not mind to be the magpie to take to the skies…..cool use of form….
I felt a sadness here?
I feel the brief daylight captured in this.. A melancholy tone that hits home for me.
Your words paint such a vivid picture. Lovely.
Thanks for your visit to my place.
Magpies need places to rest… I can see this winter pause, a lovely enchantment.
Your use of repetition is powerful! I am always drawn to the world outside the window.
This beautiful!! Love the word picture you painted. The repetition of “chains of light die” really enhances the poem 🙂
I love the view outside your window. What a pretty garden! Your poem seems to evoke a transition from winter to spring … days are getting longer and light is increasing. Lovely imagery 🙂
I like how your words paint with image and feeling. Great job.
I love watching a storm pass us by from the comfort of my window.
I like the refrain,chains of light die ~ I can’t wait for spring to perk up those blooms in the garden ~
An excellent use of the roundel form, your descriptions create that uncertain sesonal mood very well.
Gorgeous!
I enjoyed the repetition in your poem, Alan. “Remote latticed roofs kiss the sky” – great image.
There’s something about the light changes in a storm that brings out many moods…I like this reference.
Really like the chains of light, the magpie, and the temple of rest…
Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2014/01/12/in-the-aftermath/
This is rather haunting, Alan….I love the repeated line……the “lonely magpie” and “your last goodbye”. Sigh. Beautiful.
The lonely magpie, the chains of light die…I feel the melancholy, the sad feeling that comes with such brief gray days.
Hi Alan, really enjoyed this – a depth of yearning and truth delicately achieved with a few vivid observations artfully juxtaposed – interesting work.. I’ll be back for more… All the Best to you Scott http://www.scotthastie.com
So well crafted–lovely this ittle observation of life!
The yearning of a window view in winter – captured so well in your piece. Thank you for joining us for Poetics!
Alan,
Seems like we are all engaged in seeking hope and inspiration very soon, while gazing from the windows!!
Eileen
Thank you. a very nice piece
I feel melancholie here, and refren just saying that everything has end, which follow by sunrays again…:) ~ thanks for visit/comment at my blog~ much love
quite an imagery … lovely piece 🙂
This is beautiful, sad but it describes a true emotion and something that none of us can escape.
This is lovely. Your repetition works well for you here.
oooh! i love “Chains of light die”! very effective as your repeat line!
Beautiful imagery crafted by great choice of your words! 🙂
The refrain polishes every image here! lovely…
Am I wrong. This seems melancholy to me. Like maybe someone is missing the summer?
Alan, lovely poem. And this part almost made me cry,
“Temple of rest, safe guarantee,
Pool of winter, your last good-bye
Dusk comes quickly, as sun’s rays flee,
Chains of light die.”
Thanks for me reading my piece, and it is a pleasure to meet you.
Pamela
i sensed some melancholy here? but the images are lovely. and i think the refrain works really well. 🙂