Zip! Something just went by

In a flash

Thunderous moving air

Displacing sky.


There he was chasing the stars

Wrapped in space and clouds

In the silhouette of the mountain.


In dreams of speed

Decided in fractions of moments

Splendor or disgrace

Rushing in the wind

“Gold conquers all!”


Written for Poetry Jam

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16 Responses to Downhill

  1. Gabriella says:

    The speed of some of these champions is indeed incredible. I like the image of the skier casing the stars and the energy we can feel in your words, Alan!

  2. brian miller says:

    ha you only have a fraction of a second for sure then you are flashing downhill to make those decisions…and each one takes you closer or further away from medaling

  3. Mary says:

    Oh yes, the winner or loser determined in fractions of a moment…so much depends on just a little burst at the right moment. You have captured the feeling here, Alan!

  4. Gillena Cox says:

    oh yes the winner, good write; have a nice Wednesday

    much love…

  5. Laurie Kolp says:

    And boy do those fractions of seconds count!

  6. Donna Smith says:

    It takes me too long to decide on toothpaste and ice cream. Those split second decisions and movements are amazing!

  7. peggygoetz says:

    Yes the speed is amazing. But even just being able to compete makes him/her a champion!

  8. Wendy Bourke says:

    This is great! I’m there!

  9. coalkissed says:

    This is fantastic!! I felt like I was there at the Olympics! Wonderful word paintings!!

  10. Wayne says:

    You nailed it …nicely done

  11. Rallentanda says:

    Yes it is very exciting to watch the Games from my bed at 4 am in the morning… the down side of living at the bottom of the world. The speed and the athleticism is incredible and you have captured this in your poem. Well done Alan.

  12. Myrna says:

    I can’t imagine going at those speeds. What a thrill it must be, not just to win, but to compete. Nice write.

  13. Sarav says:

    Alan, excellent write! Feeling the wind on my face, they are amazing 🙂

  14. Helen says:

    ‘Displacing sky’ .. A fantastic visual image!

  15. It is amazing how not even a full second can change everything for these athletes! It’s so fun watching the skiers (from my warm spot on the sofa!).

  16. Nick says:

    A wonderful poem about capturing that elusive gold in what are becoming tougher and tougher playing fields.

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