Train Ride

Steam train

Travelling in rocking carriages

Through rambling forests and meadow lands

Under walls and mountains

Over bridges that span rivers and canals.


Stillness and silence

Embracing the occasion

Constant and continuous

The spectacular view.


In the brief busyness of light

Through a narrow corridor and half-open door

Taste the smoke of the present

Anticipate the promise of tomorrow and arrival.


Pleasure and pain

Hope comes into view

Identity and inspiration

Separation vanishes away


Written for Poetry Jam

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7 Responses to Train Ride

  1. Mary says:

    There is always so much to anticipate when one is on a train journey. Your poem makes me think about the joy of arrival & about a new beginning after a long journey.

  2. Wendy Bourke says:

    You convey, beautifully, a sense of passages and change and contradiction and “the promise of tomorrow” – an allegory, I’m thinking, to one’s journey through life.

  3. Gabriella says:

    I like the life journey you describe, Alan, the forests, meadow lands, mountains and bridges. I also enjoyed the hopeful note at the end!

  4. peggygoetz says:

    I like the rhythm of your poem Alan. I would imagine there are many very beautiful train trips in England. I like the metaphor as well.

  5. Brian Miller says:

    the smoke of the present…anticipating tomorrow…liked that section….i love the comfort in the rock of the train…the rhtyhm of it….great opening stanza…

  6. Grace says:

    I like the different scenes from the moving window train ~ I’m always anticipating the promise of tomorrow & arrival ~

  7. Susan says:

    ‘taste the smoke of the present, anticipate the promise of tomorrow and arrival’ – love these lines!

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