This lie is more crafty
It is more subtle
Bent with fear and mystery
Distorted by sharp edges of blame
This lie is magic
It can change your life
Will protect you from havoc
Make you feel like god inside
Listen to my words
Let my knowledge guide
I only bring good news
Seasoned wisdom for the brave
Gaze at my beauty
Summers shadows given to me
Sweet captivating glory
Now before the sun is gone
Bend down and kiss
Let joy satisfy your desire
Don’t let the moment pass
The magic is yours to embrace.
—
Written for Poetry Jam
There is so much to gape in awe that one just wonders in amazement! Nicely alan!
Hank
Despite the beautiful photo, it seems there are sinister undertones to your poem. Is it the Garden of Eden and the serpent’s lie you are writing of?
crafty, subtle, mysterious lie is magic indeed…so is the transient beauty…
Most lies are filled with surface beauty and are transient at best…the magic, the lie…there are so many in our world to mislead and draw us off the path, promising a feeling of well-being. Well done!
Your poem made me think of the ‘kiss of death’. I find it can refer to may kinds of liars.
Each moment is magical when we take the time to enjoy it.
I read this twice – I can sense a deeper message in these lines. There is an undertone that is intriguing. Beautifully written.
You portrayed the shiny surface of the darkness of lies so well here. Is this a reference to the serpent in the Garden of Eden?
Lots in this one, Alan. I too read it twice and found even more. I guess most lies wouldn’t be believed if they did not have a beautiful surface.
ah now that is a wonderful magic…to bend low…and draw close…
a magic that will change your life….
I detected something sinister too in your poem. Smiling buddhas with scorpion hearts perhaps ?
I feel a sense of hypnosis in your words…
It begins with ‘this lie’ and still I want to believe in the magic.
Magic is, after all, making the viewers (in this case, readers) believe.
Magical words 🙂
Alan,
As with Mary’s thoughts, I too understood the perception of beauty, yet a temptation to test. The Garden of Eden was in my mind as well. A very clever view of magic/evil…
Eileen
So much good here!
Love these bits:
“sharp edges of blame” and “Make you feel like god inside”
wonderfully woven
Magic
I specially like the ending Alan ~ I hear the voice of wisdom over the lies ~
Indeed, Alan. The magic of the everyday is there to be appreciated if only we acknowledge it.