In The Garden


This lie is more crafty

It is more subtle

Bent with fear and mystery

Distorted by sharp edges of blame

This lie is magic

It can change your life

Will protect you from havoc

Make you feel like god inside

Listen to my words

Let my knowledge guide

I only bring good news

Seasoned wisdom for the brave

Gaze at my beauty

Summers shadows given to me

Sweet captivating glory

Now before the sun is gone

Bend down and kiss

Let joy satisfy your desire

Don’t let the moment pass

The magic is yours to embrace.

Written for Poetry Jam

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17 Responses to In The Garden

  1. kaykuala says:

    There is so much to gape in awe that one just wonders in amazement! Nicely alan!


  2. Mary says:

    Despite the beautiful photo, it seems there are sinister undertones to your poem. Is it the Garden of Eden and the serpent’s lie you are writing of?

  3. Sumana Roy says:

    crafty, subtle, mysterious lie is magic indeed…so is the transient beauty…

  4. djtsmith says:

    Most lies are filled with surface beauty and are transient at best…the magic, the lie…there are so many in our world to mislead and draw us off the path, promising a feeling of well-being. Well done!

  5. Gabriella says:

    Your poem made me think of the ‘kiss of death’. I find it can refer to may kinds of liars.

  6. Laurie Kolp says:

    Each moment is magical when we take the time to enjoy it.

  7. I read this twice – I can sense a deeper message in these lines. There is an undertone that is intriguing. Beautifully written.

  8. Justin Lamb says:

    You portrayed the shiny surface of the darkness of lies so well here. Is this a reference to the serpent in the Garden of Eden?

  9. peggygoetz says:

    Lots in this one, Alan. I too read it twice and found even more. I guess most lies wouldn’t be believed if they did not have a beautiful surface.

  10. brian miller says:

    ah now that is a wonderful magic…to bend low…and draw close…
    a magic that will change your life….

  11. Rallentanda says:

    I detected something sinister too in your poem. Smiling buddhas with scorpion hearts perhaps ?

  12. Nimi Arora says:

    I feel a sense of hypnosis in your words…
    It begins with ‘this lie’ and still I want to believe in the magic.
    Magic is, after all, making the viewers (in this case, readers) believe.
    Magical words 🙂

  13. Alan,
    As with Mary’s thoughts, I too understood the perception of beauty, yet a temptation to test. The Garden of Eden was in my mind as well. A very clever view of magic/evil…

  14. So much good here!

    Love these bits:
    “sharp edges of blame” and “Make you feel like god inside”

  15. Grace says:

    I specially like the ending Alan ~ I hear the voice of wisdom over the lies ~

  16. Indeed, Alan. The magic of the everyday is there to be appreciated if only we acknowledge it.

Thank you for reading my poems. Please don't feel you have to comment. I enjoyed writing them, I hope you enjoyed reading them, Be blessed.

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