Night Looks Like Day

Twisting, glowing, melting,

Trapped in silent shadows

I am calm, within desire

Dark sacred seeds,

Taunt me.

In this world there is no light,

For night looks like day.

I am invisible,

I am unnoticed,

Patterns swirl around me

Shinning white light

Shielding me from fear

Kissing loves reflection.

I am a candle,

A single flame,

Consuming the void,

Dancing in an echo of peace.

I am a message written in the sand.

Written for Poets United

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24 Responses to Night Looks Like Day

  1. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    Dancing in an echo of peace.
    I am a message written in the sand.

    Such wise & powerful lines.. Well penned 🙂

  2. Mary says:

    Feeling that there is no light, that one is invisible and unnoticed, would be a hard place to be. Glad that there is at least a single flame as a guide. And I hope that the message written in the sand would be a hopeful one.

  3. Sumana Roy says:

    love the image of flame against the vast darkness of night, gradually ‘Consuming the void / Dancing in an echo of peace’…

  4. thotpurge says:

    Candle consuming the void.. love that image!

  5. Mandy Moore says:

    very intense, independent and insecure all in one.

  6. vandana says:

    The truth of the world, let there be light in everyone;s heart.

  7. Kerry O'Connor says:

    I really like this poem. The pace is well measured and each image unfolds before the mind’s eye to create the overall atmosphere of night.

  8. susan says:

    Even when we can’t see it in the darkness comfort waits. The candle here symbolizes that for me. No matter if I seem visible or not, that candle glows in my heart!

  9. Gabriella says:

    Great lines, Alan! Hopefully the message on the sand will be read before the sea washes it away.

  10. This is so beautiful, especially the closing lines. Wow! Loved it!

  11. I love the close here. Poignantly penned.

  12. Claire says:

    There’s a subtle mix of moods here – the narrator is at times unsure and at times bold with a striking philosophy. Intriguing read.

  13. Jae Rose says:

    What a wise and knowing poem…i thought at first to be invisible is not a good thing but perhaps when we know and can see ourselves that is more important than others seeing us?

  14. rosross says:

    Cleverly woven.

  15. I love how your weaved to the closing line… the metaphors work so well to bring life to the night.

  16. Alan,

    I’ve always liked the comfort a candle can bring, even in dark moments. There is an eventual ability to see beyond the shadows, which I like…
    Eileen

  17. Myrna Rosa says:

    You created some beautiful lines here Alan. I think we can all be candles in the night – a light for ouselves and others.

  18. Panchali says:

    Beautifully woven… To believe is to be strong. Light is power…Brilliant message.

  19. “I’m a candle/ a single light”- a strong imagery here yet so soft… beautifully penned… 🙂

  20. glmeisner says:

    The temporary nature of being is very well expressed, I like the feel.

  21. hypercryptical says:

    Lovely words – and I love the close.
    Anna :o]

  22. Rall says:

    A message written in the sand is transient…momentary !

  23. jammy7000 says:

    Beautifully penned, Alan. I had to go back and re-read to savour it…

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