I strive to embrace country crossroads
The signpost dominates dark windows
Arrest my heart
Demolish these solid walls
For a thousand years
Stark dreams on the horizon.
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I dive into wasted orbs
The heartbeat generated to race
Lonely poppies obscure
Crackle storms weaken
Times wandered mind
Expand the germ of truth
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I tussle beneath cold dank sheets
The night prevails unexpected
Warm soft flesh
Fuses into haze
Breaches my frayed mind
Circling sorrows torn to shreds.
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“Circling sorrows torn to shreds”- a perfect ending. I liked the imagery and the usage of verbs.
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Alan, I like the strong and most meaningful verbs you have used in your poem. Great closing lines!
nice…you got my attention with arrest and demolish in the opening gambit alan…and great closing line as well….i can feel the restlessness in this…
really intense verbs conveying restlessness, the ending is strong.
Strong verbs – demolish, tussle, breaches ~ Lovely work Alan ~
ah – the restlessness can be felt – and you really chose some strong verbs… demolish..dominates.. i liked tussle especially
Beautiful. A very evocative write.
I like the change in tone from the beginning to the end. And you’ve certainly used some graphic verbs–very successful.
Those verbs really drive the point home… great use of verbs.
Superb choice of verbs in this and they give it so much life. Thank you.
i felt the struggle in this poem
Powerful. Strive, arrest, demolish.. attention grabbing. Lots of emotion and then that closing torn to shreds. Really good..
The strong use of verbs that you chose brings a fervent feeling throughout…almost like a bad dream you can’t awaken from….